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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 25, 2013 20:15:31 GMT -5
Reviews, comments, or even just requests to write the next lineup for Weapon X go here.
Also, don't be surprised if Deadpool shows up from time to time.
We try to keep him sedated, but... you know. Things happen.
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 28, 2013 13:12:47 GMT -5
Issue #1 is up.
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Post by All Star Silentking on Feb 28, 2013 13:42:12 GMT -5
I think I already expressed in writing some issues for this title, but I will express that again here. As for the issue itself, I have three complaints. One joking, one serious, and one that could be easily explained in the issue. The joking one is why aren't Deadpool's words yellow? Don't you know that yellow is the only text that is allowed to be used for when Deadpool speaks?! Serious one is that you switched from third person to first person for a single paragraph. It was out of nowhere and took me out of the story for a bit. The last one that you are probably gonna answer next issue is why did Wolverine say that some newbie who disobeyed orders just got promoted? You probably have an answer for that already, but it is kind of strange thing for Wolverine to say and even stranger if it is true. Anyway, 7.5/10. Would have been higher if it weren't for the strange switch of perspective. Also, WHERE DID DEADPOOL GET ALL OF THAT BEEF JERKY?!
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 28, 2013 13:58:12 GMT -5
I think I already expressed in writing some issues for this title, but I will express that again here. As for the issue itself, I have three complaints. One joking, one serious, and one that could be easily explained in the issue. The joking one is why aren't Deadpool's words yellow? Don't you know that yellow is the only text that is allowed to be used for when Deadpool speaks?! "Why the hell would I speak in yellow? Who talks in yellow anymore? I'll tell you, who: communists. And not just any communists either, FRENCH communists. Are you a french communist?
Also, I'm not allowed into the crayon box while on set. Not after the 'Technicolor Rainbow' incident." I don't remember switching to first person. I'll have to go back and double-check that. And yes, the "promotion" bit will be explained next chapter. "I wilmphf mempher mellmph."
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Post by All Star Silentking on Feb 28, 2013 14:06:53 GMT -5
The switch was in the paragraph that Deadpool was introduced. You replaced Jackson with "I" and "My" for a couple of sentences. Even though it wasn't in there for long, it was still out of nowhere. Also, I thought red was the color of communism? Oh wait. French communists. Yeah, yellow fits those guys perfectly. That wasn't an insult at the French! Just French people who are communist!
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 28, 2013 14:23:21 GMT -5
The switch was in the paragraph that Deadpool was introduced. You replaced Jackson with "I" and "My" for a couple of sentences. Even though it wasn't in there for long, it was still out of nowhere. Also, I thought red was the color of communism? Oh wait. French communists. Yeah, yellow fits those guys perfectly. That wasn't an insult at the French! Just French people who are communist! I couldn't find the perspective shift you were talking about. "Yeah, it's not like he has an edit button to cover his tracks or anything."I have no idea what you're talking about. "You know those edits are time-stamped, right?"
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Post by Drake on Feb 28, 2013 20:50:18 GMT -5
Just as further proof, yes, you did switch tenses at one point. It lasted a sentence and was about halfway through. It distracted me as well. My only other issue was the promotion thing, but you said there's an explanation for that, so, well, that's not an issue.
I've got to say that I'm really happy Wolverine wasn't the POV character. Between his modern portrayal in comics and my general dislike for everything that has Wolverine as the main character, I was happy to see someone else, someone I didn't even know, being the POV character. I like him. And I loved this issue. Actually, I think it's my favorite issue of yours (on this site) yet. 9/10.
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