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Post by thejellyfish on Apr 25, 2014 15:47:47 GMT -5
Issue #1 is done and should be going up relatively soon-ish. I just have to do some editing and stuff.
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Post by thetrueelec on Apr 25, 2014 19:23:50 GMT -5
Well I liked the issue but I think it could have been better if we got more of an idea who the original New Warriors are as people, only Robbie seems to give any indication of characterisation.
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Post by thejellyfish on Apr 25, 2014 21:01:08 GMT -5
Don't worry, character development will come, it will just be in future chapters. I wanted to focus on plot with this series, since Lantern on Ultimate DC is all about character development and is purely character driven. This is completely different from that.
Also, I may have been reading some of Hickman's books and emulated his style a tiny bit.
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Post by Drake on Apr 26, 2014 23:43:18 GMT -5
First off, starting with all that exposition is a bit off putting. You would have been better suited to do a zero issue with those events you mentioned occurring in that issue. Then, to start off this issue, you could do the "destroy the world" speech without useless exposition.
Second, you're rushing things way too quickly. One second Hellion and Magma are talking, the next the team's together, and the next they're fighting criminals for who knows what reason. Slow down. Your issue was short, so it probably would've been better if you'd spent a little more time developing the plot. It's ok if you want to do a plot-first story, but the plot has to make sense. This did, but only on the barest surface levels.
Lastly, give us a reason to care about these characters. Right now, that cliffhanger ending wasn't all that exciting because I could care less if Hellion dies. You spent very little time establishing the characters. If they aren't important, then why should I care?
Sorry if I sound a little harsh. I expect good things out of you because of Lantern #1.
6/10
I know you can do better than this.
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Post by Stardrifter on Apr 27, 2014 19:02:43 GMT -5
I won't repeat what's already been said too much. It wasn't bad, but not great. A lot of exposition. If you wanted to jump in on a story already in progress, giving us a point of view character who needs to learn all this might have been better. It's a cliche for a reason.
Keep em coming.
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