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Post by DiscipleofBob on Jun 3, 2015 14:13:15 GMT -5
The recap not only helps remind readers what's going on, but it invokes a sort of Star Wars theme that really helps set the tone for the chapter. Definitely keep those for the future.
I didn't know Quie was a candidate for Skrull impostor. Missed any signs leading to that last chapter apparently.
At some point the two of us should probably compare notes when it comes to the Skrulls since I have Kl'rt and the Vells as well.
I think I've recovered from the rapid introduction of a dozen new characters from the last few chapters and we're back to a fun space opera with a large, but no longer unwieldly so cast. Keep up the good work.
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Post by Drake on Jun 3, 2015 14:32:08 GMT -5
Thanks for reviewing!
I'll make sure to keep up the recap in the future.
Quie was on the mission, so she had to be. As for the Skrulls' plans for her....well, just keep reading.
I thought we'd gone over the Kree stuff at least. I'll pm you tomorrow. I'm busy until then.
Glad the characters and plot are becoming clear! Thanks for the positive comments! It really helps to give me perspective when I usually get a lot of "too many characters" reviews. It's good to know I'm not alone in thinking big casts can work.
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Jun 3, 2015 14:39:03 GMT -5
I thought we'd gone over the Kree stuff at least. I'll pm you tomorrow. I'm busy until then. We went over some stuff, but plans can change or evolve or even just become clearer over time. Big casts can definitely work, they just take a lot more effort to develop that many characters at once. It's almost always a little confusing in the beginning, but I think you're doing fine with what you're working with.
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Post by Drake on Jun 22, 2015 21:14:16 GMT -5
Guardians 13 is up and re-titled. Because of its length, I didn't do a lot of proof reading, so sorry if some of the dialogue or wording is rough.
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Post by Stardrifter on Jun 24, 2015 19:54:32 GMT -5
Not bad. I think J'son was brushed aside a bit quickly. I did like the origin of Quill's name though. Thanos seemed kinda...not as menacing as I'd expect. Of course I think the only thing I've read with Thanos is the Marvel/DC vs. mini series and I've not been impressed with him in the movies so far.
The backstory with Kill(ugh) and Quill was okay. I think his breakdown was a bit melodramatic. Could have perhaps been a bit more subtle. I don't know. I like that he's a traitor though.
I really think you need to hit a point of stability with the series. A pause for an issue or two with the grand plot for some specific character work on a quieter story to give everyone a breather. otherwise it's still good. Keep em coming.
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Post by Drake on Jun 24, 2015 21:57:58 GMT -5
J-Son ain't done yet. Not even close.
The next two issues are basically breathers. The first details Thanos' origin, what he has planned, and why. The second slows everything down to develop all of the characters a bit more.
EDIT: Also, naming Bill "Kill" was probably the single thing I regret most in my tenure on this site. I have a story reason behind it. one that's not been fully shown yet, but it was such a stupid, spur-of-the-moment thing that I can't get rid of. However, I swear that by the end of my run, he'll be back to Bill.
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Post by Drake on Aug 31, 2015 21:23:00 GMT -5
#14 is up!
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Post by thejellyfish on Sept 3, 2015 18:55:42 GMT -5
This was fantastic. I couldn't help but hear Letho from the Witcher series as I read it. Letho and Thanos are very similar characters in terms of personality and their way of doing things, so that attributed to it.
I want more.
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Post by Drake on Sept 4, 2015 11:31:22 GMT -5
Thanks for the kind words and thanks for reviewing!
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Post by Stardrifter on Sept 5, 2015 10:12:47 GMT -5
It's such a sweet love story. I hope these two lovebirds have a happy ending. I'm all verklempt.
It was good. Thanos comes across pretty well. It's more insight than I've ever read into him before, but I've never read much with him. He's just a crazy misunderstood guy. Cut him some slack!
The revelation about Star Lord was interesting. So Peter is descended from a Demi-God? He better not learn that.
Keep em coming.
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Post by Drake on Nov 27, 2015 15:50:42 GMT -5
Finally got this up! It's not as long, nor quite as good as I wanted, but it's a decent chapter that delves into Peter's character. To be fair, I haven't written anything like this in over a month, and I haven't creatively written consistently for months. It is what it is. Hopefully this gets me back on track. I hope you guys like it!
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Post by thejellyfish on Nov 27, 2015 17:31:13 GMT -5
I enjoyed this chapter. It's been awhile since one has come out and it's not as good as the others, but is still good. It gets the job done.
More Cosmo is always great and Phyla's secret actions are very inductive of both her character as well as Peter's. Another thing I liked was that it felt like he was trying to be Superman, but he isn't Superman. So Phyla stepped up and helped out, secretly.
I'm very excited for Infinity.
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Post by Drake on Nov 27, 2015 18:21:30 GMT -5
I enjoyed this chapter. It's been awhile since one has come out and it's not as good as the others, but is still good. It gets the job done. More Cosmo is always great and Phyla's secret actions are very inductive of both her character as well as Peter's. Another thing I liked was that it felt like he was trying to be Superman, but he isn't Superman. So Phyla stepped up and helped out, secretly. I'm very excited for Infinity. I'm glad you liked it! Yeah, while I wasn't happy with some of the writing, dialogue, and pacing, I was pleased with the little things I added in that revealed a lot about the characters, like your aforementioned statements. Peter really wants to be a hero, but he's convinced he's not one. Of course, that's BS, but it's his character arc. He thinks he's a murderer, thief, and overall scoundrel. He also feels as if he has a chance if he can save someone and help them grow as a person, like the Skrull. Phyla is very much about preserving what she's got left--namely, her friends. She saw a future where everything went to hell. She wants to keep everyone she loves safe from that, or any other harm that could befall them. Similarly, she wants what's best for them, even if it means manipulating their circumstances and working herself to death to do it.
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Post by Drake on Dec 23, 2015 12:43:18 GMT -5
16 is finally up!
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Post by Drake on Jan 27, 2016 10:55:42 GMT -5
Anyone gonna review this....?
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Post by Drake on Feb 1, 2016 19:02:06 GMT -5
I lied about the length of this issue. It's rather short.
#17 is up!
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 10, 2016 11:08:50 GMT -5
It's been a while, so I'm starting GotG from the first issue again. For that reason, it may be a while before I get completely caught up.
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 15, 2016 23:09:56 GMT -5
I'm finally caught up. I don't remember the last chapter I actually reviewed, but trying to figure that out and give context-appropriate reviews for each chapter, so let me try to just go over the series so far. To sum up the series as a whole, it's like some combination of Guardians of the Galaxy and Star Wars combined, only much better. Like I actually want to watch this on the big screen, or at least the small screen. The humor and drama give me kind of a Young Justice vibe at times, though that may be because I finally got to finish that series on Netflix. The first time I read this series, it was difficult to keep track of all the different characters and subplots. Reading it again for a second time is much easier to keep track of names and characters and figure out exactly how everything connects. This is tough for me to do a lengthy review on because there isn't much to criticize. Damn it, make more nitpicky mistakes I can pick apart! It does still seem odd that the main character make the transition from space outlaws to space resistance leaders over the span of "off-screen time." None of the characters are bad, but I guess if I had to pick a weak link among the main cast it would probably be Heather. I like her, but she just doesn't seem to actually contribute as much to the main plot other than being the token pink ranger, even though she's far from the only female on the team. I just can't seem to remember her actually doing important things. Sure, she got the Nova helmet, but other than fulfilling some sort of chosen one prophecy, after reading through all seventeen chapters I don't really remember her using any powers or fighting off anyone significant.
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Post by Drake on Feb 16, 2016 10:25:14 GMT -5
I'm finally caught up. I don't remember the last chapter I actually reviewed, but trying to figure that out and give context-appropriate reviews for each chapter, so let me try to just go over the series so far. To sum up the series as a whole, it's like some combination of Guardians of the Galaxy and Star Wars combined, only much better. Like I actually want to watch this on the big screen, or at least the small screen. The humor and drama give me kind of a Young Justice vibe at times, though that may be because I finally got to finish that series on Netflix. The first time I read this series, it was difficult to keep track of all the different characters and subplots. Reading it again for a second time is much easier to keep track of names and characters and figure out exactly how everything connects. This is tough for me to do a lengthy review on because there isn't much to criticize. Damn it, make more nitpicky mistakes I can pick apart! It does still seem odd that the main character make the transition from space outlaws to space resistance leaders over the span of "off-screen time." None of the characters are bad, but I guess if I had to pick a weak link among the main cast it would probably be Heather. I like her, but she just doesn't seem to actually contribute as much to the main plot other than being the token pink ranger, even though she's far from the only female on the team. I just can't seem to remember her actually doing important things. Sure, she got the Nova helmet, but other than fulfilling some sort of chosen one prophecy, after reading through all seventeen chapters I don't really remember her using any powers or fighting off anyone significant. I'm really glad you're enjoying it! It's funny that you mentioned reading it a second time through with no breaks makes it much easier to follow, because that's sort of what I was going for. It's a long form story (well, I guess it could be much longer) in the vein of, as jelly has pointed out, Hickman's stories. I always knew individual issues (like with Hickman) would be tougher to swallow than the whole. I'm glad someone read it as it was meant to be read and has a greater understanding of my intent and story. The team evolving "off screen" was lazy on my part, but I wanted to tell my story in as short a time span as possible (because, at the time, I found myself struggling with the title). Yeah, Heather's probably the weak link. She was meant to be the POV character, and they often end up being more bland than the world around them. I always had intended the Nova plotline, but I realize that doesn't necessarily spice things up enough. I do want to say that there might be more to the Nova "Chosen One" arc than meets the eye. Just keep reading my titles, and you'll get there eventually. .......although it might not help Heather's character.
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Post by Drake on Feb 28, 2016 14:39:32 GMT -5
18 is up!
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 29, 2016 14:53:01 GMT -5
What's this? Heather does something? Heather almost does something? Heather tries to do something? Nevermind, Heather doesn't get to do anything...
Good chapter though. Lots of stuff going down. Lots of arcs and subplots seemingly nearing their end.
I'm not as familiar with Adam Warlock, but my understanding is that he's pretty popular, so maybe a stronger fan of the character might be more upset at the character's brief appearance.
Maybe it's just the first time I've noticed it, but I'm not sure what the point of fake space curse words like d'ast are you if Rocket's going to go full-on Deadpool-style expletives on us? I don't care one way or the other about foul language, but I know that matters to some people.
Last criticism I had: Ronan's epic space battle was way too short. Everything seemed way too summarized and consequently the whole scene lost a lot of impact. I understand those kinds of scenes are difficult to draw out and give their proper epic feel and all.
Other than that, which is mostly nitpicking, everything else is great! Rocket, Groot, Gamora, Drax, Thanos, Starlord, Phyla, Cosmo all get wonderful moments to shine.
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Post by Drake on Feb 29, 2016 15:01:32 GMT -5
What's this? Heather does something? Heather almost does something? Heather tries to do something? Nevermind, Heather doesn't get to do anything... Good chapter though. Lots of stuff going down. Lots of arcs and subplots seemingly nearing their end. I'm not as familiar with Adam Warlock, but my understanding is that he's pretty popular, so maybe a stronger fan of the character might be more upset at the character's brief appearance. Maybe it's just the first time I've noticed it, but I'm not sure what the point of fake space curse words like d'ast are you if Rocket's going to go full-on Deadpool-style expletives on us? I don't care one way or the other about foul language, but I know that matters to some people. Last criticism I had: Ronan's epic space battle was way too short. Everything seemed way too summarized and consequently the whole scene lost a lot of impact. I understand those kinds of scenes are difficult to draw out and give their proper epic feel and all. Other than that, which is mostly nitpicking, everything else is great! Rocket, Groot, Gamora, Drax, Thanos, Starlord, Phyla, Cosmo all get wonderful moments to shine. Yeah...I really needed to give Heather a big moment there. She'll kind of have one. Warlock was going to have a bigger role in Multiwar, but, y'know, that happened. At least I left it open for his return. As for space cuss words...well, there are three more issues. Too late to turn back now. I half assed the Ronan battle scene. I own that. I could have at least tried some more, but I didn't. I knew that as I posted it.
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 29, 2016 15:42:34 GMT -5
I guess a good in-universe explanation could be Rocket learned some new expletives from Heather. Bonus points if you make Belgium one of the worst expletives in the universe and get the reference.
Not doing Multiwar was a good move IMO. There were just too many ways that could have ended badly, and I don't just mean in-universe.
As far as Ronan is concerned, it's probably better than the alternative of a scene that's too long and drawn out and has little effect on the overall plot. So I guess you made the right call there.
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Post by Sonny Daye on Mar 1, 2016 14:43:53 GMT -5
I agree that Ronan's scene was way too short. I didn't really have a problem with Warlock's scene, however.
But still, I think you're doing a great job with the title. I'm glad I decided to give it another chance. I know that a few months back I really took quite the s*** on this title. This one of those titles that starts out kinda okay but gets better and better with each issue.
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Post by Drake on Mar 1, 2016 17:35:56 GMT -5
I agree that Ronan's scene was way too short. I didn't really have a problem with Warlock's scene, however. But still, I think you're doing a great job with the title. I'm glad I decided to give it another chance. I know that a few months back I really took quite the s*** on this title. This one of those titles that starts out kinda okay but gets better and better with each issue. Thanks for the kind words and thanks for trying it out again!
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Post by Drake on Mar 1, 2016 17:50:30 GMT -5
Thankfully only 6 or so people have read this issue, because I had to correct something in it. The stone in the custody of the Nova Prime is the SPACE stone, not the Reality Stone. I apologize for the mix up.
EDIT: It's also blue.
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Post by Drake on Apr 30, 2016 22:32:42 GMT -5
Believe it or not, despite how short this issue is, it actually includes everything I intended it to. I thought it'd take up more space. Guess not. Funny how Amazing turns out way longer than intended, and this way shorter.
Anyway, this was tough to write. The toughest issue yet, in fact, and I think it shows in my writing. Hopefully the next is better.
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Post by Sonny Daye on May 5, 2016 14:59:33 GMT -5
Felt bad that no one has reviewed this yet, sooo... I really liked the action. The entire issue felt like an action scene, which is good. The writing did seem a little..."grindy" (I don't know what else to call it). It's kind of like what I did in IIM#6--I didn't write it because I wanted to, I wrote it because I had to. That's...really all I can say. I'm not as invested in this as I am in ASM. However, it is sad that this title is coming to a close. I could tell it's been a blast for you. And I wish you could tell us what your next title will be. It's about time we started paving the way toward the Avengers.
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Post by Drake on May 5, 2016 15:15:39 GMT -5
Felt bad that no one has reviewed this yet, sooo... I really liked the action. The entire issue felt like an action scene, which is good. The writing did seem a little..."grindy" (I don't know what else to call it). It's kind of like what I did in IIM#6--I didn't write it because I wanted to, I wrote it because I had to. That's...really all I can say. I'm not as invested in this as I am in ASM. However, it is sad that this title is coming to a close. I could tell it's been a blast for you. And I wish you could tell us what your next title will be. It's about time we started paving the way toward the Avengers. Grindy is a good word for it. As in, "I was grinding my teeth as I wrote it, because it was that difficult (read: bad) to write." For whatever reason, Guardians is getting progressively more difficult to write. Hopefully the next issue comes easy. All that said, I have really enjoyed writing this title. It's pushed me in ways no other title has. I've evolved far more as a storyteller because of this title than any since my very first long-form fanfiction project on ff.net. I strived to be funnier, to be weirder, to make you cheer louder and cry deeper. It didn't always work out (like, y'know, all of my first issue), but I improved a lot, and I'm so grateful you guys helped with the process by reviewing. As for my next title, it won't come anytime soon. I do have a few ideas, though, so we'll see.
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Post by Drake on Jun 15, 2016 16:00:07 GMT -5
20 is up
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