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Post by Drake on Jan 12, 2013 17:25:20 GMT -5
#0 is up!
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Post by All Star Silentking on Jan 12, 2013 18:30:15 GMT -5
And I thought my Suicide Squad issue was short! Then again, this is a zero issue and mine was an issue 1... Anyway, it was okay. I will say that Spidey's death here is what I prefer than 616 Spidey's death. It definitely shows Spider-Man at his best as he kept on fighting to his last breath. But somehow...I think that it could have been longer. But it was still very well written and as said before, this is Spider-Man at his best even if he does die at the end. 8/10
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Post by Drake on Jan 13, 2013 11:11:15 GMT -5
Yeah, the shortness had to be there. The events that occur before and after what was shown are HUGELY important to the plot, and I just couldn't extend the issue. I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the kind words.
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Post by jordan on Jan 13, 2013 12:07:17 GMT -5
I've been reading Spider-Man for a good number of years now, and that was like the fourth "Death of Spider-Man" story, at least, that I've read.
JMS wrote two of them, both mind-fucks, both extremely awesome.
BMB wrote one as the death of Ultimate Spider-Man, it was really good on the emotion side, I'm just not a GG fan.
And you wrote one. Loved it.
The emotion at the end of the issue just struck a cord with me. Maybe because I'm a long-time Spider-Man fan, or because you gave Peter so much history and personality in like...1500 words, maybe.
I hope the rest of your series is up to par with this issue. 9/10. You lose one for shortness.
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Post by randomfan on Jan 31, 2013 18:48:56 GMT -5
I loved this issue, this is probably the most perfect deathSpdey is ever going to get, hell this is probably one of the best deaths a comic book character is going to get.
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 1, 2013 10:21:48 GMT -5
Short, but that's okay. It's to be expected.
Like your Kang issue, the length is okay because you only needed to describe one scene and you did it very well. The carnage is apparent (pun not intended) and it's definitely a very dark take on Spider-Man. I think this could work very well and I look forward to more.
I'm wondering at this point if this and the Fantastic Four title should have some creative dates edited and just be considered "future" titles, as opposed to some of the other titles which could be "past" or "present." Just a running pattern I seem to be noticing.
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Post by Drake on Feb 1, 2013 17:46:59 GMT -5
Glad you liked this. It's going to be a lot less dark in future issues. That was only for this particular issue. Well, I guess the tone might be similar to the recent movie, except for #1-4 maybe. We'll see. And this shouldn't be a future title. Jordan said any modern titles should take place late 2012/early 2013. Avengers takes place in mid February 2013.
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Post by Drake on Feb 5, 2013 22:01:12 GMT -5
Issue 1 is up!
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Post by Drake on Feb 8, 2013 17:46:24 GMT -5
It's been multiple days without a single review, so I'm saying this again, Issue 1 is up!
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 8, 2013 20:25:01 GMT -5
It's been multiple days without a single review, so I'm saying this again, Issue 1 is up! All-Star X-Men says hi!
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Post by All Star Silentking on Feb 8, 2013 21:01:50 GMT -5
I read it and I have to say it was very enjoyable. I also liked all the name drops of various Spider-Man characters. Everyone else will have to read the issue to see who got referenced. Miles was a decent character and the story was easy to follow. But I do hope that you will reveal how Peter survived or had managed to get home without revealing that Spider-Man was still alive or that Peter was Spider-Man. Or why Pete gave up on adventuring in the first place. All in all, I give this 9.5/10.
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Post by Drake on Feb 8, 2013 22:32:36 GMT -5
All will be explained, SK, probably in the first arc even. But that mystery of what just happened before and after Spider-Man's final battle is a mystery to be revealed...
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Post by jordan on Feb 9, 2013 0:58:24 GMT -5
Sorry, I've been slow running my rounds of #1's, but I just viewed the rest of Spider-Man #1, excellent work. I enjoyed it a lot, I like Miles, I like Peter, Ganke is okay but better than in the comics. I look forward to see how he got home w/out revealing anything.
There isn't a lot to complain about in this issue, maybe a grammar mistake here and there, but nothing that detracted from the overall experience.
7.5/10.
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Post by randomfan on Feb 9, 2013 4:39:00 GMT -5
I really enjoyed this, Miles seems like a good character and I'm very intruguied by how Peter's still around and why he's not Spider-man. There's not really much to say it was just a really well done chapter.
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Post by Drake on Feb 17, 2013 16:23:04 GMT -5
Just released issue #2! It's much shorter than #1 but still definitely a good length. Read my solicitation again for an explanation as to why this is.
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Post by All Star Silentking on Feb 17, 2013 16:45:21 GMT -5
It was great as always, but one thing bugged me. The scene where Miles was stuck to his teacher's car. It bugs me that Mr. Vita didn't realized that his student was stuck sooner, but I decided that might be possible. But the biggest problem I had was Miles somehow jumping so high to dodge a truck when his hand was stuck to the car. It is hard to see in my head how that part played out without Miles' hand getting unstuck from the car and then sticking back again. I just make sense of it. Anyway, 8/10 because that truck scene really confused me.
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Post by Drake on Feb 18, 2013 17:08:52 GMT -5
It was a bit exaggerated. He didn't literally jump twenty feet into the air. He just made it over the truck. I always pictured it was Miles awkwardly dangling from the side of the car while jumping even more awkwardly over the truck.
And the "not noticing" thing. Yeah, I questioned that some as I planned it, but I decided it was possible under any number of situations and you also have got to let there be some suspension of disbelief, even for ordinary everyday actions.
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Post by All Star Silentking on Feb 18, 2013 17:49:07 GMT -5
Well, I guess I can better picture the scene also. Also, I pretty much stated that I was gonna suspend disbelief for the teacher not noticing Miles. But you were kind of pushing it. Anyway, still a great issue and I will be looking forward to more.
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 19, 2013 16:50:48 GMT -5
Let me start by saying that I'm going to be a tough reader to please here, and it has nothing to do with your writing. The idea of a Batman Beyond style Spider-Man is definitely unique and intriguing, but I'm having a lot of trouble suspending my disbelief about the concept. Peter Parker as a retired superhero/rich CEO just does not work in my mind. And I've never read any of the comics with Miles Moranes, so the character has zero appeal to me. Once again, this has nothing to do with you or your writing, but this is where I'm coming from, so I'll probably be negatively biased. My introduction to the character is not a pleasant one. You try to make them relatable by talking about video games. Being a gamer myself, I SHOULD be able to relate to them, but their conversation sounds less like an honest conversation about video games and more like what marketers would think a conversation about video games would sound like. The fact that you have to explain what FPS means with a bolded parentheses that completely takes the reader out of the story only makes it worse. I'm already hating Miles for completely arbitrary reasons and I don't even know the guy. (Remember, me = negative bias) Surprisingly, I do like your portrayal of Peter Parker. He's more mature, but kind and humble, and exactly what I'd expect of a grown-up Spider-Man (or as Joe Quesada would say, something that doesn't exist ). My problem is even after this chapter I'm still not buying Peter Parker, the meek photographer of the Daily Bugle and part-time science nerd, as a major CEO who managed to acquire OsCorp. The next few scenes feel like they were cut and pasted from the recent Spider-Man movie, with the field trip, being isolated from the group, and getting bit by the spider. You handled it a little better and explained some of the plot holes. Still an idiot-ball moment for Parker to leave Miles next to the super spiders. Given it's Peter Parker, there is no possible way he could expect someone NOT to get bitten by the super spiders. After all, he knows the experience firsthand. The various intern-names were glossed over, but that's okay. I got just enough of an impression to feel that as a reader they'd probably be important later, but not enough that it feels forced. Except for Tommy Fireheart. Pretty much every adult is already calling "Yeah, he's gonna be a supervillain." Having no familiarity with the character, I would have been surprised had that scene not been in there. I get what you're saying about the "twenty feet in the air" was more of an exaggeration by the observers, but it just doesn't come across that way to the readers. It reads like just suddenly jumped literally twenty feet into the air. Lots of observers. Clear superpowers. I sincerely doubt Miles is going to be able to keep this under wraps for long. Okay, you officially overdid it with the thugs. I get that they're supposed to be uneducated, probably racist dumbasses, but the n-word is used so often it's basically punctuation, and their ghetto accents are comical, not intimidating. When I say comical, I don't mean they're actually funny, just bad. Please don't do that again. It doesn't add to the story and actually detracts from it. Well, I guess it's time to wait until next issue to see the reaction to Mr. Morales's superpowers.
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Post by Drake on Feb 19, 2013 19:33:22 GMT -5
That's alright. I understand all of your opinions and agree with some of them. I questioned how I would do the thugs, but I decided to go with an exaggerated, comic-like (in that it is somewhat unreasonable) version and I guess it doesn't work for some people. I myself am a gamer. I honestly only put that in because A) it is something teens talk about and something I argued about with my friends the other day and B) it was a decent way to introduce the characters.
Tommy's got a lot more going on with him, something that will be discovered and discussed in the future. I'm glad you like my Peter. He's currently my favorite character to write. I am sorry, however, that you don't buy the "CEO" concept. This was really just my example of if Peter didn't have to spend half his time fighting crime, what he would be able to do, and I thought it was a fairly realistic example, considering how incredibly smart and talented Pete is.
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Post by Drake on Feb 19, 2013 22:55:52 GMT -5
Also, adding this in, Peter doesn't like Tommy, but for reasons that will be revealed. Pete's issue with Tommy is personal...like family personal. Not with Tommy's family but Pete's...anyway, that's really spoilers. I probably shouldn't have said that but I want you to understand that scene. While it's no surprised he's going to be a villain, he'll be more in the lines of Curt Connors or Michael Morbius than Doc Ock or GG. You'll learn his story. It's a very real, very sad story. And I mean VERY real. There are real kids going through the same issues he is.
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Post by Drake on Mar 8, 2013 19:58:40 GMT -5
ANNOUNCEMENT: Issue two has been modified to correct slang that I (among many others) deemed to be unnecessary and wrong. Please inform me if I've missed any of it. Thank you all.
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Post by Stardrifter on Mar 8, 2013 20:22:25 GMT -5
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Really well done for an opener. My only complaint would be, if you weren't already aware of Spider-Man and his villains, it would make very little sense. A new reader coming in would have no idea what to make of all the names and powers.
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Not bad. Couple errors here and there. I would have liked to see more than a rehash of the Amazing Spider-Man movie. I haven't read anything about Morales in comics but he came across as Peter with a different appearance and a love for FPSs* *(FYI, this was stupid. Either say first person shooter or expect people on the Internet to be able to look it up.)
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I'm glad Peter was there at the end. If he wasn't, I would have called bs. All the cameras in the building and he just lets Miles go?
Issue wasn't bad. Going straight from the car problem to the mugging was a bit contrived. I half expected for him to stop at a clothes store and pick up his costume. Why not be efficient and get it all done in one trip?
Overall I'm digging your series. I'd just like to see you make Miles his own character and not Peter-lite. Hell it would have been refreshing if he wasn't a science whiz.
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Post by Drake on Mar 8, 2013 20:55:35 GMT -5
Thanks for the kind words...and the not-so-kind words! 0 I understand, but my though process was that if you're reading Spidey fics then you know about Spidey. 1 It was different enough that I hoped it wouldn't seem like a rehash, especially with what's coming. The FPS thing...yeah, I probably should have left that out. 2 I always planned for Pete to catch him. More on that next issue. This series will have a slow burn, similar to Shazam, but it'll all pay off in the end. I do not believe Miles gets a costume till issue 4, and then doesn't officially suit up in his real duds till 6 or 7 probably. Miles will be different. I agree that as of now he feels like Peter-lite, but that'll change. I have a whole new and different back story changed for him. The "science whiz" part was just staying true to the character, at least somewhat. He is portrayed as being smart, although not as smart as Pete. I tried to convey that but I guess I failed. You will see though, that his actual intellectual strengths are much less in the science category and more in the...well, just wait and read on. I always respect and enjoy reading your reviews. They're insightful and helpful. Thanks again for helping me out!
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Post by Drake on Jun 30, 2013 19:32:37 GMT -5
#3 is up!
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Post by Stardrifter on Jul 1, 2013 22:26:13 GMT -5
Not bad, but it was really hampered by the foreknowledge we have from all the other series. There was no tension during the scenes with Peter and Miles. So as well done as it was, it was just kinda boring.
Keep em coming.
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Post by Drake on Jul 2, 2013 10:38:20 GMT -5
Yeah, that was the major downside to Avengers. It was why I was originally against the idea. I changed my mind quickly, mind you, but yes, most of the tension of this first arc is ruined by Avengers.
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Post by ReadingTrance on Jul 5, 2013 11:51:01 GMT -5
I completely agree with Stardrifter.
I like the use of MJ and the mention of other Spider-Man characters in the obituaries. Mayday is a weird name...haha.
All in all, a good read, but nothing super exciting as we basically already know what happens. 7.5/10
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Post by Drake on Jul 5, 2013 14:05:41 GMT -5
Mayday is actually Pete's daughter from MC2 Marvel.
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Post by ReadingTrance on Jul 5, 2013 14:54:41 GMT -5
I assumed she was an actual character, just a strange name.
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