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Post by thejellyfish on Dec 20, 2015 23:51:10 GMT -5
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Post by thejellyfish on Dec 20, 2015 23:52:34 GMT -5
Seriously though, damn good job. I was legitimately shocked at a few points and the poker scene was well done, as short as it was.
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Dec 24, 2015 9:49:27 GMT -5
Me this morning: "Well I've got one chapter up, so maybe l'll catch up on another title real quick. I checked Spider-Man at the end of last month and got caught up so there should be at least one-Holy crap three chapters!"
There's not much for me to say that I haven't said before. Your Spider-Man is perfect as usual, and you have an excellent balance between Peter and the main cast. I appreciate that it seems you've deviated from the 'spider totem' direction Black Tarantula seemed to be taking things. You handled it well and still setup a lot for later.
Modern Latveria and Modern F4 next issue huh? I don't think either of us know exactly how this is going to go down, especially with my take on how Latveria is in reality vs the preconceptions held by the rest of the world. Should be interesting.
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Post by Drake on Jan 22, 2016 21:57:27 GMT -5
In a slightly slower, much longer issue, "Marked for Destruction" begins! Issue 16 is up!
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Feb 10, 2016 10:08:36 GMT -5
Great morning after issue. Good plot and character development without seeming boring, especially after everything that happened last issue.
Your dialogue with Peter is spot-on, and you're getting a lot better with the female characters, though when Gwen and MJ started talking about new ways to use the word 'bitches' I was still cringing a little. It's not 100% perfect yet but it's still a vast improvement.
Peter sticking it to Osborn is a refresh return to the snarky hero we all love. Even if Norman still holds a lot of the cards, it's good to see Spidey not taking his crap as much.
Gwen's chance meeting with Toomes and forcing herself into his space seemed overly forced. If they just happened to be sitting next to each other and somehow struck up a conversation I think it would've felt more natural. Instead we get the brief exchange about daddy issues which is just the awkward sort of creepy. That and Gwen seems like she's quick to reveal personal information and confidential company information to a creepy stranger. Makes me wonder if she's ever lent money to any Nigerian princes. (Or perhaps in this universe it would be Wakandan?)
And then of course there's Latveria coming up soon, which obviously I'm anxious for.
Good issue and as usual looking forward to more.
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Post by Deleted on Feb 10, 2016 11:56:08 GMT -5
- I definitely agree with DoB that it was nice to see Peter get some stinging verbal jabs in on Norman. The best part being that Norman basically had no choice but to take his lumps and move on. Very well done.
- I also have to concur that the Gwen/Toomes conversation felt forced. It's understandable that Gwen might feel the need to connect with someone at that moment, but the whole exchange came across as unnatural.
- The Gwen/MJ exchange was a bit better. It conveyed their closeness in an effective manner, but some of the dialogue itself was rather awkward.
- The consistent level of quality you bring to this title with each installment is fantastic. It's clear this is the story you're the most invested in. Which isn't to take away from any of your other work at all, but there's an almost infectious level of enthusiasm that shines through in your writing here.
Looking forward to more. Keep up the good work.
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Post by Drake on Feb 10, 2016 11:56:27 GMT -5
Great morning after issue. Good plot and character development without seeming boring, especially after everything that happened last issue. Your dialogue with Peter is spot-on, and you're getting a lot better with the female characters, though when Gwen and MJ started talking about new ways to use the word 'bitches' I was still cringing a little. It's not 100% perfect yet but it's still a vast improvement. Peter sticking it to Osborn is a refresh return to the snarky hero we all love. Even if Norman still holds a lot of the cards, it's good to see Spidey not taking his crap as much. Gwen's chance meeting with Toomes and forcing herself into his space seemed overly forced. If they just happened to be sitting next to each other and somehow struck up a conversation I think it would've felt more natural. Instead we get the brief exchange about daddy issues which is just the awkward sort of creepy. That and Gwen seems like she's quick to reveal personal information and confidential company information to a creepy stranger. Makes me wonder if she's ever lent money to any Nigerian princes. (Or perhaps in this universe it would be Wakandan?) And then of course there's Latveria coming up soon, which obviously I'm anxious for. Good issue and as usual looking forward to more. The "bitch and proud" thing was an actual quote from a couple of my (female) friends. I might be trying too hard, but I'm attempting to make the girls sound like actual people, and not stereotypically effeminate females. That's not an accusatory finger or anything, btw. I just mean generally speaking in literature guys tend to "play it safe" with women because they're afraid of offending someone. I'm avoiding that route (by basing Gwen and MJ off my friends and older sister), although, again, I might be trying too hard. I'll take a little more time to examine it in the future. The one part of this issue I truly did not like was the Gwen-Toomes scene. It was definitely kind of forced, but I needed to address that development in as little time as possible. I suppose, to be fair, that Gwen's suffering from emotional turmoil, so some unusual things might fly, but it's definitely too much too soon. I've also realized I'm not good at making pseudo-creepy jokes. The "daddy issues" thing was a joke. It also showed Toomes' crassness. I just guess I don't handle those well, because this isn't the first time I've tried to go a bit dirtier with the humor and it's fallen flat. Anyway, thanks for reviewing, the critiques, and the kind words!
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Post by Drake on Feb 10, 2016 11:59:24 GMT -5
- I definitely agree with DoB that it was nice to see Peter get some stinging verbal jabs in on Norman. The best part being that Norman basically had no choice but to take his lumps and move on. Very well done. - I also have to concur that the Gwen/Toomes conversation felt forced. It's understandable that Gwen might feel the need to connect with someone at that moment, but the whole exchange came across as unnatural. - The Gwen/MJ exchange was a bit better. It conveyed their closeness in an effective manner, but some of the dialogue itself was rather awkward. - The consistent level of quality you bring to this title with each installment is fantastic. It's clear this is the story you're the most invested in. Which isn't to take away from any of your other work at all, but there's an almost infectious level of enthusiasm that shines through in your writing here. Looking forward to more. Keep up the good work. Thank you for reviewing and thanks for the kind words! The one thing I wanted to attempt above all else with the OsCorp status quo was to see how far I could take Peter without losing the very things that make him special. So far, it's one of my proudest successes with the title, and I'm glad I'm not the only one who's enjoying it. My response to the rest of your review is basically covered in my response to Dob, haha! Welcome to the site, by the way!
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Post by Drake on Mar 6, 2016 16:33:04 GMT -5
Latest issue is up!
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Mar 7, 2016 9:45:51 GMT -5
It's rather odd that the chapter is called 'Doomed' yet starts out with Gwen and Sandman.
This reminds me, do we know where Spider-Gwen's powers come from? I thought I previously read that it was all the suit's technology, but here it implies that Gwen's powers are her actual powers.
Well-done fight scene between Gwen and Sandman. Cops seem a little green for a city that's supposedly been dealing with supers for over a decade. Nice double fakeout with the water hydrant.
Iron Man has a hotline? I can't remember the last time I've seen cops actually phone a superhero who was actually available. Well, the cameo is nice anyway. It kind of feels like Iron Man and Gwen in at least one of her identities might have a history? Not a romantic or physical one, mind you, but their dialogue reads like they're relatively familiar with one another.
Minor nitpick: quotation marks. Yours do the angling thing that Word auto-formats them to do. Which wouldn't be a problem, except when you end sentences a certain way, like with a hyphen, it angles the quotation the wrong way and it looks really off. I managed to change the settings on my Word Processor so that the quotation marks are all vertical. You can change it by re-adding all the quotation marks manually when you post the chapter. Or figure out a way so that the quotation marks are consistent, if you prefer the aesthetics of the angles.
I had actually forgotten that Daredevil and Foggy were on your claims list. Seeing them here was kind of a surprise.
New suit for Spidey. That's nice. Very Young Justice with the alternate colors. I can see the Oscorp brand action figure now: "Changes colors in hot and cold water! Now available at Toys R US!"
I hate to be pedantic on details, but unless they were already in Europe, a flight to Latveria would take a lot longer than two and a half hours. When I was researching for Superman, I found out that if Superman wanted to fly from Metropolis, DE to Smallville, KS without breaking the sound barrier, it would take at least three hours. Even if the jet were going comic levels of supersonic, which seems unnecessary for a stealth mission, we're still talking over twelve hours (I'd give a better estimate but at the time of this review I don't have time or space to do the math).
Apparently DeWolff said some sort of innuendo? I went back a few times and I didn't catch anything that could be misconstrued as such.
"SHIELD is 100% melodrama-free." Somewhere in the world, Hawkeye just erupted into laughter and can't explain why.
Good scene between George and Gwen. Something confused me though. It sounded like Sandman had more of a motivation beyond "They're the ones that put me in prison" but the backstory George gives only really gives George and some police a reason to be distrustful of vigilantes. Maybe that was the intent and I misread some initial dialogue. Still threw me though.
I thought OsCorp working with SHIELD would be public knowledge? Even if it's not, I'm not sure I see Gwen and MJ's logic of why that's such a bad thing, other than I guess that means OsCorp has more resources than they both thought.
Obviously I saw the last scene before you posted it. I guess they're still on the farm? My initial thought when I read that was it took place in the city limits, but there was no transition between 'unconscious in the hay' and this scene, so I can only assume they're still on the farm. Personally I would've waited to intercept Spider-Man in the city or at the city limits, but it's fine either way and your story.
And we get to see the first appearance of a character I didn't think I'd be able to introduce for a long while! Can't wait!
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Post by Drake on Mar 7, 2016 20:54:37 GMT -5
It's rather odd that the chapter is called 'Doomed' yet starts out with Gwen and Sandman. This reminds me, do we know where Spider-Gwen's powers come from? I thought I previously read that it was all the suit's technology, but here it implies that Gwen's powers are her actual powers. Well-done fight scene between Gwen and Sandman. Cops seem a little green for a city that's supposedly been dealing with supers for over a decade. Nice double fakeout with the water hydrant. Iron Man has a hotline? I can't remember the last time I've seen cops actually phone a superhero who was actually available. Well, the cameo is nice anyway. It kind of feels like Iron Man and Gwen in at least one of her identities might have a history? Not a romantic or physical one, mind you, but their dialogue reads like they're relatively familiar with one another. Minor nitpick: quotation marks. Yours do the angling thing that Word auto-formats them to do. Which wouldn't be a problem, except when you end sentences a certain way, like with a hyphen, it angles the quotation the wrong way and it looks really off. I managed to change the settings on my Word Processor so that the quotation marks are all vertical. You can change it by re-adding all the quotation marks manually when you post the chapter. Or figure out a way so that the quotation marks are consistent, if you prefer the aesthetics of the angles. I had actually forgotten that Daredevil and Foggy were on your claims list. Seeing them here was kind of a surprise. New suit for Spidey. That's nice. Very Young Justice with the alternate colors. I can see the Oscorp brand action figure now: "Changes colors in hot and cold water! Now available at Toys R US!" I hate to be pedantic on details, but unless they were already in Europe, a flight to Latveria would take a lot longer than two and a half hours. When I was researching for Superman, I found out that if Superman wanted to fly from Metropolis, DE to Smallville, KS without breaking the sound barrier, it would take at least three hours. Even if the jet were going comic levels of supersonic, which seems unnecessary for a stealth mission, we're still talking over twelve hours (I'd give a better estimate but at the time of this review I don't have time or space to do the math). Apparently DeWolff said some sort of innuendo? I went back a few times and I didn't catch anything that could be misconstrued as such. "SHIELD is 100% melodrama-free." Somewhere in the world, Hawkeye just erupted into laughter and can't explain why. Good scene between George and Gwen. Something confused me though. It sounded like Sandman had more of a motivation beyond "They're the ones that put me in prison" but the backstory George gives only really gives George and some police a reason to be distrustful of vigilantes. Maybe that was the intent and I misread some initial dialogue. Still threw me though. I thought OsCorp working with SHIELD would be public knowledge? Even if it's not, I'm not sure I see Gwen and MJ's logic of why that's such a bad thing, other than I guess that means OsCorp has more resources than they both thought. Obviously I saw the last scene before you posted it. I guess they're still on the farm? My initial thought when I read that was it took place in the city limits, but there was no transition between 'unconscious in the hay' and this scene, so I can only assume they're still on the farm. Personally I would've waited to intercept Spider-Man in the city or at the city limits, but it's fine either way and your story. And we get to see the first appearance of a character I didn't think I'd be able to introduce for a long while! Can't wait! Whoo boy, this is a lot to respond to. First off, thanks for reviewing. -Yeah, "Doomed" probably would've worked better for the next issue, but, y'know, it might be thematically appropriate *nudge nudge*. -In my mind, individual cops have rarely dealt with superheroes. Keep in mind, New York's a big city, and their PD is the biggest in the US. So, I imagine interaction between heroes and cops are fairly limited. The department as a whole probably has a way of handling things, but individual cops would react different ways. -Iron Man and Gwen don't have a history. I'm sorry if it implies as much but I haven't picked that up from a few readings. It's just supposed to imply that Gwen knows of Tony, since he's the most famous superhero in the world (which does kinda contradict something Norman previously said, but I digress; Sonny and I weren't on the same page and it makes more sense this way). As for the hotline, I mean it makes sense. He's the biggest public superhero in the US (the F4 don't really count, since they're not technically superheroes but explorers). -I'll try to fix the quotations issue in the future. -I might just use that toy idea. And anyway, this suit is a onetime thing. It's supposed to look like Spidey's "Big Time" suit from the comics. -DeWolff's line was supposed to imply that SHIELD's tech is so advanced that they can travel to Latveria in two hours. This is a story based on comic books. I think "quick travel" can be a thing. -Not innuendo. Peter's line was supposed to read like "There's a lot of things I shit." DeWolff cracked a joke about the wording. -Sandman does have more motivation. It will be explained next issue. George is giving his side of the story. -OsCorp's affiliation with SHIELD is kept secret, because honestly there's no good reason for it to be public. They build super secret super prisons. I thought it just went with the territory. Gwen and MJ's "oh shit" logic is that this does in fact mean OsCorp has more resources than they thought, and they're potentially making enemies of SHIELD. I'll tease something: Gwen may have become a vigilante for reasons related to OsCorp. -They're in the city. I probably didn't make that clear enough. The "city streets" line was supposed to do that, but since it didn't, I'll go in later and add something. A lot of the info in this issue has not yet been provided. Things are shrouded in mystery. I tried to give enough of an explanation so you could follow the events, but it seems like I failed on some fronts. Maybe it's how long the issue is. Maybe I should have fewer mysteries. I don't know, but I'll try to avoid making that mistake in the future.
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Mar 7, 2016 21:41:34 GMT -5
-In my mind, individual cops have rarely dealt with superheroes. Keep in mind, New York's a big city, and their PD is the biggest in the US. So, I imagine interaction between heroes and cops are fairly limited. The department as a whole probably has a way of handling things, but individual cops would react different ways. I suppose from what we know in our universe so far that makes some sense. SHIELD's in the open but its agencies are secret. I'd say the F4 would count as superheroes in the traditional sense. At least by the present they will have had quite a number of public world-saving escapades under their belt. Still, thanks for clarifying on Iron Man-Gwen. Their dialogue just seems a bit more familiar. The thing is once you go so fast and break the sound barrier you start to make a lot of noise. In populated areas it can cause collateral and it completely wrecks stealth missions. I think you're underestimating just how fast "flying across the world in three hours" actually is and what the implications are. I tried to convey more realistic expectations in previous SHIELD appearances. Not that they can't have super-fast, awesome tech, and for emergencies, there's always that thing about shooting out into space and using the orbit of the Earth (okay, I never actually completely understood that but it's something I see a lot in modern sci-fi things). I see now. Didn't catch that before. Understood. It's not always clear that there's more to the mystery then what's presented. Sometimes it feels like you give a bit of exposition, it ends with the reader still having questions, but it sometimes reads as that's all the information there is and what the reader just read is supposed to answer all their questions, when it's not and there's more down the line. I was just confused since you went from crashing into a haystack and falling unconscious to inside the city. I figured it was either something like Spidey accidentally crashing inside city limits, or the whole encounter was taking place outside the city. Even a throwaway line like "After being smuggled inside the city" would be enough to explain the transition.
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Post by Sonny Daye on Mar 11, 2016 12:43:23 GMT -5
Good issue, enjoyed it a lot. If you want to use Iron Man more, you surely can; you write him quite nicely. Spider-Woan and "Turtle-Man's" fight was very entertaining. I'm not really sure what I think about the "emergency number" the P.D. has for Iron Man. Part of Happy's job is scouting out crime in the city (kind of like Oracle, but to a much, much lesser extent), so he would've caught the trouble Sandman was causing. But at the same time, I think it's okay that the P.D. can contact Iron Man. Loved Gwen and George's scene. Really great development between the two. I love these kinds of scenes (that's why they're all over IIM ) and I think they really add to the story. It makes me care about the characters. And George needed a little more screentime. S*** Charlie Maverick s***! Best line in the title so far. I'm really excited to see present-day Doom. I would've liked to see more befoe the issue ended, but that's a nitpick. Loved the Iron Man reference on the plane, by the way. Made me feel really giddy for some reason. Wait... Since he was in this issue, does that mean he's in continuity? I'll give this issue a 9/10. One of the best in the title.
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Post by Drake on Mar 11, 2016 12:48:48 GMT -5
I suppose technically, yeah, it does. Huh. Well, let this be motivation! Get Iron Man OFFICIALLY into continuity! Huzzah! *pumps fist*
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Mar 11, 2016 12:55:26 GMT -5
I suppose technically, yeah, it does. Huh. Well, let this be motivation! Get Iron Man OFFICIALLY into continuity! Huzzah! *pumps fist* Now, let's not get carried away. We still want to be civil about this. We don't want to get into a war over continuity. *wink*
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Post by Sonny Daye on Mar 11, 2016 12:58:38 GMT -5
*Helmet closes* You just started a war!
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Post by Sonny Daye on Mar 11, 2016 13:02:39 GMT -5
Wow... Don't know where that came from...
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Post by DiscipleofBob on Mar 11, 2016 13:09:00 GMT -5
I could do this all day.
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Post by Drake on Apr 10, 2016 14:20:14 GMT -5
18 is up
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Post by Sonny Daye on Apr 10, 2016 22:03:55 GMT -5
2/10, no Iron Man references.
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Just kidding, if you couldn't tell. My real score is 8. I would go more in-depth, but it's late and I'm hella tired right now. Great issue, nevertheless.
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Post by Sonny Daye on Apr 11, 2016 15:20:34 GMT -5
Okay, time to go a little deeper.
That Spidey/Lady Latveria fight was kickass, though I do think Spidey was overdoing it with the quips. Spider-Man usually knows when to shut up, and I think this was a situation where that should've been the case. Of course, humor is his coping mechanism, and he probably was scared out of his wits, so maybe the quips weren't unwarranted.
I'm really loving the sideplot involving Sandman and Capt. Stacey. And I'm glad you're including Marko's daughter. To me, his daughter is very central to his character. I think that's why I like him so much. He's a bad guy with a heart.
By the way, what suit is Spidey wearing? I want to think it's the symbiote suit but I'm not sure.
So, yeah, I'd rate this 8/10. Solid issue.
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Post by Drake on Apr 11, 2016 18:50:54 GMT -5
I treat it as a full blown psychological coping mechanism, which is why you see it when he's mask-less around people who know he's Spider-Man too. To me, Spider-Man is someone who doesn't take much seriously, and is very much part of his psyche. Spidey's the class clown Peter never was but wanted to be. "Peter" is the drama, the weight, the emotion, and that breaks through while he's Spidey too, only less frequently. In many ways, I view the two as halves to a larger whole, perhaps leaning slightly in favor of "Peter." I don't necessarily agree with the oft-throw around logic that Spider-Man is just a mask and Peter Parker is the real person, in the same way I don't think Clark Kent is completely a mask and Superman's the real guy. Batman on the other hand.... Sandman and Detective Stacy (he never got promoted in this universe) are two of my favorite characters to write, and bring in a "gray" element that I've never really had before. You'll see that more next issue. Thanks for reviewing!
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Post by Sonny Daye on Apr 11, 2016 21:08:05 GMT -5
To me, there isn't a "mask" or a "real guy" to Spidey. I like to think of it as a real guy wearing a mask, if that makes any sense. Sure, he has a secret identity, but his personality's always the same, no matter what clothes he's wearing. But I'd have to disagree with you on the "doesn't take much too seriously." Yeah, he likes joking around, but I think that deep down that, no matter what he's doing, he knows what's at stake and he knows that he has a responsibility. That's my two cents. Everything I've said is most likely wrong, though...
And cool! That's the "Big Time" suit, right? I love that suit! Hands-down one of my faves.
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Post by Drake on Apr 11, 2016 22:42:07 GMT -5
To me, there isn't a "mask" or a "real guy" to Spidey. I like to think of it as a real guy wearing a mask, if that makes any sense. Sure, he has a secret identity, but his personality's always the same, no matter what clothes he's wearing. But I'd have to disagree with you on the "doesn't take much too seriously." Yeah, he likes joking around, but I think that deep down that, no matter what he's doing, he knows what's at stake and he knows that he has a responsibility. That's my two cents. Everything I've said is most likely wrong, though... And cool! That's the "Big Time" suit, right? I love that suit! Hands-down one of my faves. I agree about the whole "responsibility" notion. I think Peter does take it seriously. His Spider-Man persona just gives off the sense that he doesn't. To clarify, Peter cares but pretends like he doesn't as Spider-Man because it's equal wish fulfillment to not have a care in the world (he's basically the opposite of that, anxious all the time, feeling the pressure of the world on his shoulders), and because humor helps him make sense of the insanity around him. As for the rest, to each their own. He's an icon open to interpretation.
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Post by Drake on Apr 24, 2016 15:23:00 GMT -5
Finally put this together. 19 is up!
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Post by Sonny Daye on Apr 24, 2016 17:40:01 GMT -5
Yay, more Rich! I love me some Rich! Rich needs to take stammering lessons from Iron Man.
I'm not getting why Stacy hates super heroes.
Holy crap, we need to put Sandman and Blizzard in a room together. That would be insanity. You write Flint so well. Every time he's on-screen, it's a joy.
I've noticed that there's a lot more swearing than usual. Doesn't really hinder my enjoyment, but can these characters say "gosh" or "darn it" once in a while?
Uncle Ben's three-second-long appearance was nice. But do Doc Ock and Ben have similar voices?
I love it when Doom refers to himself in the third person. So we finally get to see him. I think you wrote him rather well. I'm glad you showed the more rational side of him. That's why I like him, because how (kind of) nice he can be. But, just like Uncle Ben's appearance, Doom's screentime was too short.
God, that ending was really sad. "They lied about their days. They lied about their jobs. They lied about their lives, and no one was fooled into thinking it was the truth." That right there is amazing writing.
Well, I certainly enjoyed this arc. Doom's appearance, while well-written, was waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too short. You built up to that moment really well, and all it was was really: "Join me, Spider-Man." "No." "Okey-dokey. You can go."
I can't help but give this a 10/10. Despite my hindrances, they're pretty much just nitpicks, not actual problems with the issue.
So, what's next for Spider-Man and Spider-Gwen?
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Post by Drake on Apr 24, 2016 20:01:21 GMT -5
Yay, more Rich! I love me some Rich! Rich needs to take stammering lessons from Iron Man. I'm not getting why Stacy hates super heroes. Holy crap, we need to put Sandman and Blizzard in a room together. That would be insanity. You write Flint so well. Every time he's on-screen, it's a joy. I've noticed that there's a lot more swearing than usual. Doesn't really hinder my enjoyment, but can these characters say "gosh" or "darn it" once in a while? Uncle Ben's three-second-long appearance was nice. But do Doc Ock and Ben have similar voices? I love it when Doom refers to himself in the third person. So we finally get to see him. I think you wrote him rather well. I'm glad you showed the more rational side of him. That's why I like him, because how (kind of) nice he can be. But, just like Uncle Ben's appearance, Doom's screentime was too short. God, that ending was really sad. "They lied about their days. They lied about their jobs. They lied about their lives, and no one was fooled into thinking it was the truth." That right there is amazing writing. Well, I certainly enjoyed this arc. Doom's appearance, while well-written, was waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too short. You built up to that moment really well, and all it was was really: "Join me, Spider-Man." "No." "Okey-dokey. You can go." I can't help but give this a 10/10. Despite my hindrances, they're pretty much just nitpicks, not actual problems with the issue. So, what's next for Spider-Man and Spider-Gwen? Stacy's disdain comes from the fact that he feels powerless because of their existence. What's a human hero to a superhuman one? Sandman and Blizzard would be awesome together! Hilarious and scary! I include swearing in how I feel is a realistic manner, particularly with cops and teens. That said, I'll try to tone it down. It's less Ben and Otto sound the same and more Peter is actually beginning to lose it. Doom was originally going to play a larger role in the arc, but because I had to cut out the F4 and because Gwen's plot took up so much space, he just lost screen-time. I'm glad the ending had its desired effect. Next arc will feature a whole lot of Peter/Gwen. Their relationship is going to go through the ringer in my time with the title. Getting a 10/10 is a jaw-dropping experience for me. I haven't received a score so high since my first issue on the site, the original Spider-Man #0. I'm honored, even if I'm unsure whether I deserve it or not. Thanks for the kind words. You can't know how much it means to me.
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Post by Sonny Daye on Apr 24, 2016 20:28:56 GMT -5
You say you always have fun with this title, and it really shows while I was reading. None of the writing seems forced.
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Post by adrini on Apr 26, 2016 20:23:39 GMT -5
You are having the personalities and relationships change organically. It's not something you see all the time and I like it. The title has a number of moving parts, but it moves at a pace that it's not too hard to follow.
The pacing it leaving the story time to grow, which is good. So far well done.
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Post by Drake on Apr 26, 2016 20:24:51 GMT -5
Thanks for reviewing!
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